this week we have been learning how to create a create a piece of writing using a picture to help us.First we had a class brainstorm on what the picture was about, then we brainstormed some adjectives. Finally we started our writing . I am sharing it with you ,please leave a comment. Thanks!
Think about using your senses. Smell, taste, hear, feel, see.
Remember to use correct punctuation and spelling.
Remember to use similes, and adjectives.
Use correct sentences.
I can see burnt logs and i can smell smoke, it look like trees to me. One of the trees
started falling. There is a bridge there i went into the water i can see a lot of things there
like fishing and sharks i was cold when i come Out of water brrrrrrrrr. i see a person there
i do not like it fine can i be your friend yes. you can. lets go to md’s ok. Then come on.
what is your name. Arabella. I like that name and my name is april. We jumped in the
water we were playing a game in the water the game was holding the breath
longer. I winShe had a little sister and brother well I had a older brother
he is 9 One day me and arabella went to the beach with my mum and dad
we had fun me and Arabella went to the deepest end I can't breathe then my dad came
and got me I was safethen we had fish chips for dinner and then She
want to have a sleepover Then then we had a pillow fight with Mum and Dad katene
don't want to me Arabella and Dad and Mum Matt's katene with the
pillow He looked like a chicken hahahahahahahahaha we woke up and then we had breakfast
pancakes r it was yummy then I arabella wanted to have one more We had pancakes for
breakfast it was yummy Then we dropped arabella at home. I went to arabella
house she has 2 dogs i’m Scared. She said it ok april.Ok. Her brother is mean
to me well i went into the room it is messy but I cleaned it up.
It was all tidy. Me and Arabella had McDonald's for tonight I
went up the bunk bed with arabella. Samuel and Madilyn went in the
bed. I Had a nightmare. I was cold.I didn't
want to wake arabella up and I couldn't sleep. .It was the morning.
Arabella said are you ok. Yes i’m ok. Are you Sure. yes. Ok ok ok. And its my
Birthday today. Ooo Happy Birthday april. I’m 9. Yeah and do
you know its my birthday. Happy Birthday Arabella. Now i’m 10. Yay
Let's go to McDonald's I have some money in my pockets. how much do you have.
100647474. How can you have that much in your pocket TELL ME NOW. no ok. Ok but do you
now Where is Samuel and Madilyn are. No. Oh no we Need to find them. Ok. we
started falling. There is a bridge there i went into the water i can see a lot of things there
like fishing and sharks i was cold when i come Out of water brrrrrrrrr. i see a person there
i do not like it fine can i be your friend yes. you can. lets go to md’s ok. Then come on.
what is your name. Arabella. I like that name and my name is april. We jumped in the
water we were playing a game in the water the game was holding the breath
longer. I winShe had a little sister and brother well I had a older brother
he is 9 One day me and arabella went to the beach with my mum and dad
we had fun me and Arabella went to the deepest end I can't breathe then my dad came
and got me I was safethen we had fish chips for dinner and then She
want to have a sleepover Then then we had a pillow fight with Mum and Dad katene
don't want to me Arabella and Dad and Mum Matt's katene with the
pillow He looked like a chicken hahahahahahahahaha we woke up and then we had breakfast
pancakes r it was yummy then I arabella wanted to have one more We had pancakes for
breakfast it was yummy Then we dropped arabella at home. I went to arabella
house she has 2 dogs i’m Scared. She said it ok april.Ok. Her brother is mean
to me well i went into the room it is messy but I cleaned it up.
It was all tidy. Me and Arabella had McDonald's for tonight I
went up the bunk bed with arabella. Samuel and Madilyn went in the
bed. I Had a nightmare. I was cold.I didn't
want to wake arabella up and I couldn't sleep. .It was the morning.
Arabella said are you ok. Yes i’m ok. Are you Sure. yes. Ok ok ok. And its my
Birthday today. Ooo Happy Birthday april. I’m 9. Yeah and do
you know its my birthday. Happy Birthday Arabella. Now i’m 10. Yay
Let's go to McDonald's I have some money in my pockets. how much do you have.
100647474. How can you have that much in your pocket TELL ME NOW. no ok. Ok but do you
now Where is Samuel and Madilyn are. No. Oh no we Need to find them. Ok. we
found them.
nice story. i really liked how you used those type of words in your story like nightmare,smoke and burnt. good job. by Arabella:)
ReplyDeletekia ora thank you for your comment. i hope you have a good day. by april
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